オンラインコース1

I agree that online courses are more effective than traditional classes. Online courses are having a progress rapidly, and will make us essential.

Online courses can use cheaper than traditional classes. For example, when our school is far away, we need to have a train or a bus to go to our school. We have had an enviroment of the internet when we were childhood. So we can use online courses reasonably.

Additionally, online courses have a flexibility. In the case of traditional school, we cannot getermin the beginning time and the placement. But online classes can be anytime and anywhere. They will be able to match our lifestyle.

Online classes are cheaper and more flexible for us than traditional classes, and we will recognize that online classes are increasing constantly.

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"I agree that online courses are more effective than traditional classes. Online courses are progressing rapidly and will become essential."

• この部分は元の文にほとんど変更を加えませんでした。文章が明確で、意見がしっかりと述べられています。

"Online courses can be cheaper than traditional classes. For example, when our school is far away, we need to take a train or a bus to get there. We have had access to the internet since childhood, so we can use online courses more reasonably."

• ここでは、"can be" を使って、オンラインコースが通常よりも安価である可能性を示しています。また、"more reasonably" を使って、オンラインコースをより合理的に利用できる理由を説明しています。

"Additionally, online courses offer flexibility. In the case of traditional schools, we cannot determine the start time and location. But online classes can be taken anytime and anywhere, allowing them to match our lifestyle."

• この段落では、オンラインコースの柔軟性について述べています。従来の学校との比較を通じて、オンラインクラスの利点を強調しています。

"Online classes are cheaper and more flexible for us than traditional classes, and we can see that online classes are constantly increasing in popularity."

• 最後に、オンラインクラスの利点をまとめています。これらのクラスが人気を集めていることを強調し、オンラインクラスの重要性を強調しています。

このように、修正した文章は元の文の内容を維持しつつ、より明確で読みやすい形に改善されました。